Step Three: Writing the Essay, Tips for Success
Even seemingly boring topics can be made into exceptional scholarship
essays with an innovative approach. In writing the essay you must
bear in mind your two goals: to persuade the scholarship officer
that you are extremely worthy of receiving college assistance
and to make the officer aware that you are more than a GPA and
a standardized score, that you are a real-life, intriguing personality.
Unfortunately, there is no surefire step-by-step method to writing
a good essay. EssayEdge editors at www.EssayEdge.com will remake
your essay into an awesome, memorable masterpiece, but every topic
requires a different treatment since no two essays are alike.
However, we have compiled the following list of tips that you
should find useful while writing your scholarship essay.
1. Answer the Question. You can follow the next 12 steps,
but if you miss the question, you will not be win any scholarship.
2. Be Original. Even seemingly boring essay topics can
sound interesting if creatively approached. If writing about a
gymnastics competition you trained for, do not start your essay:
"I worked long hours for many weeks to train for XXX competition."
Consider an opening like, "Every morning I awoke at 5:00
to sweat, tears, and blood as I trained on the uneven bars hoping
to bring the state gymnastics trophy to my hometown."
3. Be Yourself. Scholarship officers want to learn about
you and your writing ability. Write about something meaningful
and describe your feelings, not necessarily your actions. If you
do this, your essay will be unique. Many people travel to foreign
countries or win competitions, but your feelings during these
events are unique to you. Unless a philosophy or societal problem
has interested you intensely for years, stay away from grand themes
that you have little personal experience with.
4. Don't "Thesaurize" your Composition. For some
reason, students continue to think big words make good essays.
Big words are fine, but only if they are used in the appropriate
contexts with complex styles. Think Hemingway.
5. Use Imagery and Clear, Vivid Prose. If you are not adept
with imagery, you can write an excellent essay without it, but
it's not easy. The application essay lends itself to imagery since
the entire essay requires your experiences as supporting details.
Appeal to the five senses of the scholarship officers.
6. Spend the Most Time on your Introduction. Expect scholarship
officers to spend 1-2 minutes reading your essay. You must use
your introduction to grab their interest from the beginning. You
might even consider completely changing your introduction after
writing your body paragraphs.
- Don't Summarize in your Introduction. Ask yourself why a reader
would want to read your entire essay after reading your introduction.
If you summarize, the scholarship officer need not read the
rest of your essay.
- Create Mystery or Intrigue in your Introduction. It is not
necessary or recommended that your first sentence give away
the subject matter. Raise questions in the minds of the scholarship
officers to force them to read on. Appeal to their emotions
to make them relate to your subject matter.
1. Body Paragraphs Must Relate to Introduction. Your introduction
can be original, but cannot be silly. The paragraphs that follow
must relate to your introduction.
2. Use Transition. Applicants continue to ignore transition
to their own detriment. You must use transition within paragraphs
and especially between paragraphs to preserve the logical flow
of your essay. Transition is not limited to phrases like "as
a result, in addition, while . . . , since . . . , etc."
but includes repeating key words and progressing the idea. Transition
provides the intellectual architecture to argument building.
3. Conclusions are Crucial. The conclusion is your last
chance to persuade the reader or impress upon them your qualifications.
In the conclusion, avoid summary since the essay is rather short
to begin with; the reader should not need to be reminded of what
you wrote 300 words before. Also do not use stock phrases like
"in conclusion, in summary, to conclude, etc." You should
consider the following conclusions:
- Expand upon the broader implications of your discussion.
- Consider linking your conclusion to your introduction to establish
a sense of balance by reiterating introductory phrases.
- Redefine a term used previously in your body paragraphs.
- End with a famous quote that is relevant to your argument.
Do not try to do this, as this approach is overdone. This should
come naturally.
- Frame your discussion within a larger context or show that
your topic has widespread appeal.
- Remember, your essay need not be so tidy that you can answer
why your little sister died or why people starve in Africa;
you are not writing a "sit-com," but should forge
some attempt at closure.
1. Do Something Else. Spend a week or so away from your
draft to decide if you still consider your topic and approach
worthwhile.
2. Give your Draft to Others. Ask editors to read with
these questions in mind:
- What is the essay about?
- Have I used active voice verbs wherever possible?
- Is my sentence structure varied or do I use all long or all
short sentences?
- Do you detect any cliches?
- Do I use transition appropriately?
- Do I use imagery often and does this make the essay clearer
and more vivid?
- What's the best part of the essay?
- What about the essay is memorable?
- What's the worst part of the essay?
- What parts of the essay need elaboration or are unclear?
- What parts of the essay do not support your main argument
or are immaterial to your case?
- Is every single sentence crucial to the essay? This MUST be
the case.
- What does the essay reveal about your personality?
- Could anyone else have written this essay?
- How would you fill in the following blank based on the essay:
"I want to accept you to this college because our college
needs more ________."
1. Revise, Revise, Revise. You only are allowed so many
words; use them wisely. If H.D. Thoreau couldn't write a good
essay without revision, neither will you. Delete anything in the
essay that does not relate to your main argument. Do you use transition?
Are your introduction and conclusions more than summaries? Did
you find every single grammatical error?
- Allow for the evolution of your main topic. Do not assume
your subject must remain fixed and that you can only tweak sentences.
- Editing takes time. Consider reordering your supporting details,
delete irrelevant sections, and make clear the broader implications
of your experiences. Allow your more important arguments to
come to the foreground. Take points that might only be implicit
and make them explicit.
- Have your Essay Professionally Edited. The scholarship application
essay is too important not to spend $50 for its improvement.
Editing houses like EssayEdge at http://www.EssayEdge.com will
significantly improve your essay's style, transition, voice,
grammar, and tone; EssayEdge will also make content suggestions
to ensure your essay is unique and memorable.